Little girl lost

On the phone, with his mother, trying to make her understand that his divorce was a good thing.  “No, mom.  I don’t want to try to stay together.  I don’t love her anymore.”

On the phone, with her son, not understanding why he thought divorce was an alternative.  “But what about your vows,” she whispered, looking around making sure her granddaughter, his daughter, didn’t hear her.

In the hallway, eavesdropping on the conversation, she wants to disappear.   Feeling her childhood slipping away,  she sobs, wishing she could crawl back in time when mommy and daddy still loved each other.


Trifextra: Week Fourteen 33-word prompt, but this time, a 33-word prompt with a twist. Your task, should you choose to accept, is to take a scene that involves (or affects) at least three people. You should then write this scene from the point of view of three of the characters, using 33 words for each character.


About KimB

I am a mommy to 3 wild and wonderful boys, wife to my husband. I am a stay-at-home mommy, who would like to work if the perfect job came along. Trying to find a way to make money from home so we can have more of the "wants" not just the "needs". We live in the sort of-country and have a pretty big garden, but no animals, except one small, dark, and furry dacshund.
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6 Responses to Little girl lost

  1. I think that this is good! You have captured the three different points of view really well 🙂

  2. Poor baby. Very well done.

  3. Thanks for linking up to Trifextra this weekend. Great job capturing the different perspectives of a parental feud. Hope to see you back soon.

  4. jannatwrites says:

    This made me want to cry. (Translated: great job on your story). I wonder why it is that adults don’t realize kids hear everything we say whether we want them to or not.

  5. Rachael says:

    It’s always the littles that get hurt the most…Nice entry this week 🙂

  6. Ouch. Poor kid. The child at least recognizes the basic problem. Mommy and Daddy can’t be made to love each other. Vows or not. Grandma is going to get hit harder in the long run than the grandbaby on this one.

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