Be true to yourself

Abby couldn’t wait to get away.  The roaring cacophony of her relatives, buzzing and laughing around the table, was just getting to be too much.  This picnic was the last thing she wanted to do today.  She longed for a time and a space where she could be alone.  And be quiet.  A warm meadow, filled with colorful flowers, a place to just be herself and not be defined by her family’s loud, pesky antics.  Some of her little brothers and cousins were really getting on her nerves.  And their mouths!  How she wished for a bar of soap to wash them out.  That would teach them.  They were always hanging around, in her face, flitting around like a bunch of annoying insects.   Her mother, Miss Queen Bee herself, let them swarm about Abby, always expecting her to take care of them.  Her boyfriends were more important to her than her own children!   She blinks back tears, thinking about her father, killed that summer day so long ago.   As she thinks about her dad, she knows he wouldn’t want her to think these thoughts, she begins to feel a bit guilty.  Family was everything to him.   This was her family, after all.  This was her hive.  She had no time for this sorry-for-herself nonsense.  There work to do, nectar to gather, pollen to spread.  She dusted off her wings and flew into the sunshine.

Abby, a bee

Trifextra: Week Eleven

The challenge is to write a response that is between 33 and 333 words long and uses the words listed below.  Use the words however you wish, but make sure that all three appear in your response.  Oh, and they must appear in order.
1. cacophony    2. soap     3. insects


About KimB

I am a mommy to 3 wild and wonderful boys, wife to my husband. I am a stay-at-home mommy, who would like to work if the perfect job came along. Trying to find a way to make money from home so we can have more of the "wants" not just the "needs". We live in the sort of-country and have a pretty big garden, but no animals, except one small, dark, and furry dacshund.
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12 Responses to Be true to yourself

  1. Amanda says:

    I like your take on this! Partly because I really like bees. 🙂 But also it was a fun surprise reading along, to find myself in the mind of one!

  2. barbara says:

    cute – thanks for sharing it. 🙂

  3. This is clever. I liked that you were talking from the bee. When I sit on my deck, I get dive bombed by those Carpenter Bees. They are big and fat and want me off the deck so they can drill holes in it. 🙂

  4. jannatwrites says:

    I like your take on the prompt. I guess bees have pity parties, too. Glad she snapped out of it 🙂

  5. Yes, very clever. I liked it especially now that the bees are having such a hard time. They deserve a little spotlight. 🙂

  6. Nice response to the challenge

  7. kayennepeppa says:

    Haha. This is so clever.

  8. Dana says:

    Methinks Princess is ready for a castle of her own, out from under the shadow of the Queen… 😉
    I love your story – excellent!!

  9. booguloo says:

    I enjoyed the way you turned your situation into a hive.

  10. I liked the insects shifting from an annoyance to a sense of community in the word hive, as well.

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